User blog comment:Troy168/The Ultimate Choice - Idea's?/@comment-26979215-20160101222800

A few things you might want to consider:

EDIT: Now that I said everything I wanted to say and can see the size of it, I feel kind of bad for saying, "A few things," then launching into this huge post.

Firstly, the average villager in feudal society is unlikely to have any combat abilitiy aside from, "hit it really hard" unless they've had militia training from the feudal lord just as the average person in today's society doesn't have any combat training. So don't worry about implementing combat, just include a line or two about the MC being frightened over having no combat experience and rationalizing not getting invovled because he doesn't think he can even help so he shouldn't even try.

Two, why can't the man run away? If you're returning to town, you're either going to be on a main road if you're a trader or more likely an apprentice running errands or some goat trail if you're a hunter or gatherer. If you're on a main road, it seems unlikely the man would not be able run away on his own unless he's injured or crippled or the slug girl is just really fast. If she caught him unware and knocked him out, then that would explain why he's at risk but it doesn't explain why she's raping a guy a couple meters off the main road or why she didn't take him somewhere more private. A rougher trail would make more sense, easier to take him by surprise which can result in him panicking and twisting his ankle or just tripping and breaking something so he can't escape. Otherwise, she would have to chase him into a dead end, easy with forest trail but he'd have to be really stupid to get lost on the main road. Whatever you choose, make sure it is very clear the man cannot get away on his own, otherwise the reader will be frustrated at not being able take the obvious action of distracting the girl, having the man run away, then running away himself. Maybe he's cornered at a cliff or river bank but make sure it's clear as to why and how everyone got to the same place.

Thirdly, make sure the choices are equivalent. If the village is thirty minutes away, then the boy and player knows the man is done for. If the village is five minutes away and the man is about to be raped or if he can see the village but the man is being dragged into the thicket where he may be lost, then the choices are less clear as to what the outcomes are.

Fourth, if the boy is considering taking man's place, he's going to be debating the value of his own life versus the man's. If the man is a stranger or someone the boy doesn't like, the boy is probably not going to take his place unless he is like a choir boy missionary and holds to a moral code above all else but if that was the case, he may have been blessed by Ilias so he doesn't get raped while spreading the faith. If the man is someone the boy is fond of or if the boy he knows he has wife or kids while the boy is girlfriendless, the choice becomes a moral dilemma for him.

Fifthly and finally, from a player standpoint, most people are going to play a side story to a monster girl porn game to see monster girl porn. If one choice has porn and the one does not, most players are going to pick the choice with porn it, regardless of the morality in it unless the scene includes a fetish they don't like. Both paths are going to need porn, for players to even consider one over the other, and the best equivalent value is for the boy to have like a slug girlfriend back in town but another monster girl could do the trick to so long as the players consider them equivalent in attractiveness. The choice then becomes, stay faithful to your girlfriend but let an innocent man be raped and get comfort sex later in the that path or betray your girlfriend and get raped in some NTR scenario to save a man from dying / being raped / being forcibly married to a slug girl, and let him return to his family, if he has one.

Addendum: Somewhere in writing all that, I forgot one of my beginning points. You might want to consider another name for the scenario. The Ultimate Choice has a lot of weight to it, with Ultimate suggesting the greatest choice this man has made in his life or is about to. But in the grand scheme of things, one man being raped by a slug girl isn't going to upset the societal order. Of course, Ultimate could also mean final, implying that this choice is either the last choice the boy is going to make, with life changing repercussions no matter what he does. Him dying is obviously a life changing event for him but so is becoming a rape-pet, forcibly or consensually being married for the rest of his life or just ending up tramatized for life either from rape or from cowardice and guilt. But even if Ultimate is meant to be read as final, it still is fairly vague as to what the scenario entails and because of all the scenarios out there, it's best to choose a really indicative name so when people read the title, they know immediately if it will appeal to them and if they want to read it or not.